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Out on the fields one with the morning dew
Wish to forget all things I ever knew
Thoughts washed away by summer tides
Take me away until daylight dies

Quiet the air while the heavens shine
Losing the things that were never mine
The road is long but we might meet a few
Same ragged souls, same journey, too

Never grew old but I may call myself wise
Stricken down under the blazing skies
Follow me be emptiness our guide
And stripped of everything except our pride

Hollow souls split the dawn with cries
A sudden outbreak of hate and of lies

A growing whisper sounding through the trees
And spreading over land and seas
There's nothing left when head and heart collide
How are things on the other side?
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Please tell me how you like it and how you feel when reading it, everything is helpful, so don't hesitate to comment.
Thanks :)

As me and my band are about to turn these lyrics into a song, I needed to write a chorus, which is the last part of this poem. Enjoy!
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"Same ragged souls, same journey, too"
I so love the sound of it! how's the band going?
do you have any rough demoi tracks at least? I'd be interested.
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~Self-Invoked Aug 11, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I like it. Makes me think of a new beginning in life.
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~parcimony Aug 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I wanted to picture the desire for a new beginning.
Thank you! :)
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and you have to make it as a song, I want to hear it :D
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~parcimony Aug 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I hope it'll turn into a song soon :)
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:iconpunk-green-teen-xd:
for 1000 times, faving!! :la: :la: :la:
this is so genius, especially that it's not your language, I would never write something breathtaking as this!
Really, really love IT! :heart:
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~parcimony Aug 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, dear, it really means lot! :heart:
You're so sweet :meow: :heart:
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:iconpunk-green-teen-xd:
cause it's true :heart:
thanks :blush: you're sweet too :meow:
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I love it so much! ;^;
You are so talented! Seriously...your work need more love. >3< :heart:
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~parcimony Aug 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you so much :heart: :)
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